The rush of the water
Goes on and on and on
Never ending
The water hits the rocks
A calm soothing noise to the ear
A sense of purity
Crystal clear water
Giving rememberance of a new life
It shows how gentle the earth really is
Water has glimpses of sparkle
Here and there
Fog from the forest so moist
Rises through the dew-filled air
How can nature be so beautiful?
How can nature be so refreshing?
One deep breath
Taken to a place unimaginable
Once you get there
You don't want to leave
I really like how you wove questions into your poem. I also like the phrase "rememberance of a new life." I honestly can't think of anything to improve it.
ReplyDeleteEmma, this is a great poem. I love how at the end it says, "once you get there you don't want to leave" It's a great way to end the poem. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI have no criticism for this poem, other than that you may try to incorporate some subtlety, let the reader guess what your poem is about.
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